This is, in my opinion, as good as the original. You can find that here. Regret Holding belief close to beating heart: how now to begin this story? Commencing belief, honesty placed: strong passion swallowed soul, grasped mind. Our middle movement, soaring, reflective: leading onward, to coda. Beginning, ending; passion departed: transformed bitter memory. Regret … Continue reading Poetry Archive :: Regret
Welcome to Week Two of 'Editing my own Work for Fun' and not only is this still true, but it's becoming very much the learning experience. This, structurally, was a bit of a challenge: working to strict syllable counts has the potential to do my head in on difficult days. As a result, there is a … Continue reading Poetry Archive :: Hate
Rewriting your own stuff is an odd experience: looking at a poem you considered the pinnacle of achievement, that absolutely did not need to be edited at the time, before realising what a doofus you were about a year ago. It is a sobering experience, understanding what has come to pass, normally via the pain … Continue reading Poetry Archive :: Transition Two
Welcome to the first of what will be four week's worth of recycled content, looked at with what probably counts as a more mature set of eyes, considering the original of this piece was first written just over a year ago. The brief for all these 'upgrades' is simple: improve on the originals. In this … Continue reading Poetry Archive :: Transition One
This is also pretty good. Maybe we're actually getting somewhere... Fool Burning multiple pointless candles: who’s foolish in this equation? Relinquish control, village idiocy: set controls for chaos. Stocks jointly sharing, vegetative weight: turnip headed conviction. Which one is the fool? Listener, perhaps; except nobody’s caring. All of you to blame: culpability’s silence; entirety damned.
For the next few weeks I'll be revisiting and editing some of the previous work I've produced and reposting it here. On reflection, the originals will be removed, because there doesn't need to be two copies of the same thing hanging about. Would this poem be picked for an edit going forward? I'm quite pleased … Continue reading Poetry Archive :: Didactic
Please feel free to add a buffoon of your choice as a suitable subject... Liar Transparent cretin, ineffective: hands tongue-tied pale idiocy. Compulsive hauteur, contempt: steely-eyed, toothless arrogant standpoint. Determined stooges, chorus: faded also-rans sentiments worthless. Dissemination, thoughtless: soap-box, poor pulpit sermon misguided. Outcome predicted, neurotic: liars, foolish arrogance unmasked.